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05-15-2007, 08:52 PM

Retane, your posts are great when it comes to storytelling. It was fun to read your posts, and it was interesting how you made the storyline flow. Hinting at your relationship with Olibu was a nice thing to do, although I don't believe it added more than a sense for your character's lust for revenge. If your character wasn't normally violent, it might've been more interesting to include that little tidbit about the two.

One last thing: I know you probably know this, but work on your spelling and grammar. Type your posts in a word processer first. Makes it much easier to read when you don't see a grammar mistake every few sentences or even every few words.

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