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[Bujin]

Pretty creepy, Minoshia. xD That said, you got the very feeling that I think you intended to come out of this post. Your descriptions were detailed, and it wasn?t drawn out enough for me to completely lose interest. Aside from the occasional misspelling, or the minute grammar error (capitalizing something that shouldn?t have), it was a well-written piece of work.

Or, if you want a specific:

It was a survival game by nature, and Minoshia thought about this often, because he couldn?t fully grasp the concept of a contestant not wanting to simply kill everyone; that was his strategy and it all seemed perfectly okay to him.

It may not be horrible grammatically, but it?s a mouthful and frankly, I eventually skimmed over the sentence about halfway through. Maybe split it into separate sentences. I?unno ? that?s more of just personal preference than anything else.

That's about it.

Mine: Link