05-27-2007, 07:01 PM
I couldn't tell if it was intentional or not, but the sentence structure and grammar kinda made it really hard for me to both understand and enjoy that post. You had a few errors in spelling that stuck out as well. Things like "The mercenary growled low." kinda made me feel awkward.
It's possible that I lack adequate knowledge of Retane and 'Lone' to understand that post, but yea, it also came off as kind of rushed in a sense.
Here's me: Day Two: Early Morning
It's possible that I lack adequate knowledge of Retane and 'Lone' to understand that post, but yea, it also came off as kind of rushed in a sense.
Here's me: Day Two: Early Morning
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