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#144
05-28-2007, 10:23 PM
If you were asking how to spell "Imedeately" then it's spelled "Immediately".

This wasn't my favorite piece of writing by you. It seemed rather weak in its purpose. The voice was decent, but I couldn't tell if those were the options ahead, depending on his actions or inevitable consequences. Also, there were a few mistakes that could have been remedied with some rereading.

Ultimately, it felt like a filler. If it was a filler, than sure, it was good. If not, then it falls to the land of mediocre.




As you guys can see, I'm giving people a break from reading. Just post your RPs.
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