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#156

05-30-2007, 01:05 AM

Quote:Originally posted by Retane
Day Two: Afternoon

Better than your last two. You're finally slimming down on those substitute words and you didn't fall into the "direction-esque" sentencing.

The RP itself was decent. There were maybe three or four typos at the beginning, however, which could have been remedied with a revision. Just one.

For what it was: 7.5 - 8/10

Placed 3rd in Dante's Abyss 08

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