nappa

[Android 17]

You're closer, but you're still not on the ball. Your one minor error is that you don't put the name of your speaker in the dialog unless it's actually spoken.

Instead of:

Yours
" Nappa: hey, vegeta look at this ship its real big I bet it can reach the stars "

You want to write:

Me
"Hey, Vegeta, look at this ship, it's real big. I bet it can reach the stars," Nappa said.

Do you see what I did there? I removed the 'Nappa:' bit from the beginning because, as Bardock said and Violet tried to reinforce, we don't write in script format. We write in paragraph format (like a book...not a movie or play script).

It is pivotal for you to understand the difference between script and paragraph writing. Because if you can't adapt yourself to write in a paragraph format, you'd be better of searching the depths of the internet for a chat rpg, instead of a play-by-post rpg.

Once you learn this lesson, myself or someone will tutor you further on things such as punctuation, capitalization, and paragraph structure, but for now, this will be one of your most important lessons.

In a nutshell

-Drop the whole 'Nappa:', 'Vegeta:', 'Anyone:' at the start of your dialog
-Replace if with 'Nappa said.' or 'Vegeta replied' after your dialog.
-Remember that dialog is anything that's spoken and should be contained within quotation marks, which are this guys: " "