nappa

[Android 17]

Originally posted by xssence
" hay testing one three this is not scrip" said nappa

" yo check out thay big sword? said nappaa

Both of those are correct. Just four small little things.

1. Don't put that blank space at the beginning of your dialog (It should be "Yo check..." not " yo check..." See what I'm talking about?).

2. Always capitalize the proper nouns (Vegeta, Nappa, America, Iraq, etcetera) and the first word of your dialog (in your case, 'Hey' and 'Yo').

3. Put a comma (,) after the last word in your dialog, but make sure it is inside the closing quotation. In your case, it should read '...big sword," said...'

4. Put a period (.) at the end of your sentences. In your case: "...big sword," said Nappa.

Those are four very minute, mechanical things, but once you are familiar with them, you'll be golden.

Now I would like for you to try your hand at writing a short conversation. Think you can handle that? It doesn't need to be spectacular, and you don't need to have anything except the talking. My goal here is just to see how much you understand, okay?

Here's an example of what I'd like you to do:

"It's been raining lately," said the little boy.

"Yea, you should come in my car out of the rain," said Burter.

"My mommy told me not to talk to strangers," the boy replied.

"Well I have candy," Burter responded.

"Okay, I guess you can't be that bad," the young child said.

Just something simple like that. Make sure to keep in mind the four little things I covered. Good luck.