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[Android 17]

In dialog-laden posts, you might want to drop the bolding internal thoughts or at least drop the quotes around them. Because in posts like this where it's a back and forth conversation interspersed with thoughts, it can be confusing as to what is a thought and what is being spoken since when you bold everything, it's harder to really depict them, even with the italics (bold accentuates more than italics).

Other than that mechanical nitpick, I thought the post was cute. It was interesting to see Cargo sort of out of his blackhearted element and having to deal with Seventeen's infantile-esque nature, while at the same time trying to keep the facade alive.

Like I said on AIM, I liked the petal bit a lot in the second post. It was interesting and read very well.

I don't really have anything I want hardcore C&C'd, but if someone has time, feel free to read this post. It's one of, what I feel, to be one of the more spontaneous, humor-laden posts: Day Five: Morning