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[Bra]

That was hilarious.

I've got to admit, you've got the 'teen angst' thing down pat, plus the hallucination bits are pretty good. I had to grin at the whole 'Alexander' nonsense, and I can tell you've certainly infused a bit of Red Mage into 17 lately.

One thing, though, is I was very surprised at how abruptly and curtly 17 confronts Paige about her failing to remember her grandmother's birthday. I could have missed it, but I could have sworn 17 was much more... careful with her. Again, this might actually be perfectly okay, if you had intended it to come out that mean.

Other than that you had a slight grammatical error, which might not actually be an error (looks like should have hiphenated 'centuries old'), and that's about it.

It was a polished post. Very random, and chock-full of 'weird', which I'm fairly sure is what you're shooting for. I... honestly tried to be extra harsh when critiquing this one so as to supply better C&C, but it's... hard to do for this one. I'd prefer it a bit longer, but this is pretty much the length Reb enjoys (I think) so I can't fault you for that. Good job, seriously.

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I guess it's my turn?

I'd be much obliged.