06-14-2006, 07:21 AM
Quote:The sun was glowing it's usual golden glimmer.
It just sounds...awkward...too many words starting with g in one sentence. EDIT: Oh yeah and because it's possesive and not a verb it should be "its"
Example: Its glow shined upon the Earth. - Possesive
It's the sun who is shining. - Verb
M'Kay?
You could have said. "The sun, high on the sky, was radiating with its usual golder shine upon the Earth."
Quote:All around, earth was going through
If you meant earth as in ground, it's okay. But if you mean the planet it should be capitalized. And preferably with an articualtion "the Earth"
I just woke up, so I only read the first post and looked only at the grammar. Someone else cand o the rest, but this can give you a good hint I suppose
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