06-14-2006, 06:17 PM
Quote:Originally posted by Toma
Quote:The sun was glowing it's usual golden glimmer.
It just sounds...awkward...too many words starting with g in one sentence.
Actually, that sentence is perfectly fine the way it is, barring the "it's." The 'g-g-g' is alliteration, which is actually a very successful tool in drawing attention to the writing. Don't change it.
[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
_=So wake me when it's through
I don't want to feel the things that you do
Don't worry, I'll be fine
I just don't want this dream, wake me up inside=_
I don't want to feel the things that you do
Don't worry, I'll be fine
I just don't want this dream, wake me up inside=_