12-07-2006, 12:00 PM
I don't like the dashes, you'd think it would help with reading it, but it doesn't. There's really no need for a double paragraph in there either, just the one will suffice. I think you're also using the elipses too often.
Sorry I can't assist with much more then that, but it's enough to ease the eyes a little when reading it. Though that's personal preference on whether or not you would want to keep those in. I read the rest and as far as content goes, it's good
Sorry I can't assist with much more then that, but it's enough to ease the eyes a little when reading it. Though that's personal preference on whether or not you would want to keep those in. I read the rest and as far as content goes, it's good