08-23-2007, 12:18 AM
Managed to find this place again, but I have to say, very nice ending to it all, Krillin. Sorry I just sort of disappeared entirely right after that one post. I have to say I prefer this particular style of your writing best ("abridged" or at least moreso than usual). Making the ending shorter really enforced the finality of what was going on, and made the ending more realistic/natural than if it had been drawn out and become too dramatic/cliche.
But yeah, I also mirror Krillin's sentiments here. Despite my recent complete lack of activity or even being here altogether, I put a lot of thought into those bits of writing, as I felt I was closing off my character. Granted, yes after rereading it a few times, I see areas I should have exploited, and stupid grammatical/spelling mistakes as well, but I feel that this was some of my best writing here on Chubbs. Any comments, suggestions, and especially criticism, would be greatly appreciated.
But yeah, I also mirror Krillin's sentiments here. Despite my recent complete lack of activity or even being here altogether, I put a lot of thought into those bits of writing, as I felt I was closing off my character. Granted, yes after rereading it a few times, I see areas I should have exploited, and stupid grammatical/spelling mistakes as well, but I feel that this was some of my best writing here on Chubbs. Any comments, suggestions, and especially criticism, would be greatly appreciated.