Fun with words

[Android-18]

Please comment O_o.

A warning ignored

?Tis but a day, where up in a heavel
Lo?! T?was but a shallow teebel
Low brumble and brook lay astraught
To gallow footed Gobs in trot

?Hoy!? a forgel figure bade
?One ought naught often wade,
?Tis but the collied of night.?
A fuggled Gob felt sudden fright.

?Oi ye old trot, shog with you.?
Imply loided the leading lew
??Fore I cut thy ragoid noddle,
waggle thy tongue, troth and fobble.?

?Thou hast made a grave mistake.?
Ne?er a curse that she could fake
?Sessa! Vile malapert wight,?
loured her voice with sudden delight

One by one the tots did poffy
O?er muttled though shambled tofty
Down brumble brook that lay astraught
Not-a-one flew a tumly strot

O?re the cleff the creatures fell
Met well with the Gawpher Twell
Harbered beast of dreaded teeth
One by one the gobs would seeth.

Smote and torn, the Gawpher fed
Slaughtered Gob lay strewn in red
Fond tots left dead to farce
The hoggled witch bayed with tarse

?A shoyful fate for the lub of them.?
Into the night she grumbled of lym
?Oi! ?Tis but a tiddle try.?
And off she went, by-the-by.

[Hellfighter 17]

That made me want to commit mass genocide, It is a gerat play on words, I could never do that, but I hate that people use dto speak like that. >.<

[Ander]

Very good. Not many people could string together such a poem. The meaning was so much more deeper than the words displayed. I'm not good at commenting on poetry, but I liked it very much.

[Android-18]

Lol I never do this but it's an assigment for creative writing class. I was inspired by: http://home.earthlink.net/~lfdean/carrol...rwock.html

[Ander]

Originally posted by Android-18
Lol I never do this but it's an assigment for creative writing class. I was inspired by: http://home.earthlink.net/~lfdean/carrol...rwock.html

Ah, I remember the good ol' Jabberwocky. He was always a different thing to everyone, and talked really funny.

[Rem-13]

Ialways liee jabberwock poem AND I really enjoyed yours, the only thing I didnt like was the last line. Just doesnt sound right, but its otherwise awsome. I suggest reading it aloud.

[Android-18]

What about the last line didn't you like? I had a hard time ending the poem, so go ahead and pick at it.

[Hellfighter 17]

If you don't become a artist 18, I'll commit mass genocide.

[Rem-13]

I... I dont know. The last sentence...it just doesnt tickle my tounge like the rest of it. *shrugs* *laughs at his lame explaination*

[Ander]

Just the "by-the-by" part. What about it is incidental or secondary?

[Android-18]

o.o...I thought it sounded cool ^_^...

how about:

?A shoyful fate for the lub of them.?
Into the night she grumbled of lym
?Oi! ?Tis but a tiddle try.?
And off she went with a subtle sigh.