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Looking for some criticism before the WMAT really kicks off. Its been a while since I've sat down and written consecutive posts as Rad, so I'm hoping there's not too much rust that needs breaking off.
Any feedback is appreciated.
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I like your posts. I hadn't read a ton of your work prior to this tournament, and I'm really looking forward to watching you interact with some semi-decent competition. Stylistically, I like your creativity. When describing physical confrontation, you can get a little choppy. What I mean by that is, the casual flow of Raditzu when he's talking or being a smartass seems interrupted when he decides to fight. 17 does a great job of carrying over his nonchalant attitude into combat, if you need a reference.
Obviously, you're a great writer but I had to give you something to work with.
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Thanks!
I'll definitely keep that in mind while I write my upcoming posts.
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the time, and if it left... I would be fine."
