01-27-2009, 09:22 PM
I've been out of the game for a while mainly doing poetry and rough outlines for a comic series I'm starting so I might be a little rusty. Any criticism is massive appreciate, the tougher the better.
Story so far...
After arriving on Earth Ares wastes no time getting acquainted with the local inhabitant of a nearby farm, engaging the being in combat only to discover the inadequate fighting potential of the man which ultimately led to the farmer's demise. Ready to travel after a brief night's rest the boy mounts a cow and goes forth into the wide rolling plains.
Traveling quickly became a bored but not quick enough as the next thing he knew he was in the middle of an old West town govern by a Mr. White. When two robbers hold up a store Ares had been browsing in the shopkeeper enlists him to catch up with the culprits and bring back his zeni. Finding this an easy task, the teenager tracks down the bandits but only a hair too late as another bounty hunter beat him to the punch having knocked out the two bandits. Accusing the boy of being one of the thieves the gunman draws on the youth only to be taken back by the ease at which Ares caught the bullets out of midair.
More interested in getting the cash back Ares quickly disposes of the mercenary and retrieves the sack of bills and the man's hat before returning to the store to present his spoils. Upon entry, the youth is confronted with a man dressed down in a white suit speaking with the store clerk who greets the boy, impressed by his accomplishments.
Introducing himself as Mr. White he convinces Ares to take up position as the town sheriff by which the teen passively accepts. Now wearing a complimentary leather coat, hat and his new badge the boy visits the local saloon for a drink. While there the two robbers from earlier are sulking from their loss till one notices the hat on Ares' head as being that of the desperado's from that morning.
Red, the shorter criminal, denounces that and claims it to be an accomplice or possibly the one that done the gunman in and made off with the loot. Now with a posse of men, Red rises and readies to jump the unaware Ares turned about at the bar.
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread.php?t=25278
Also wouldn't mind company if anyone's interested. Was going to try hopping in another after this for some relations gathering but suppose now is as good a time as any, not to mention it would make for a more involving story once the twists start coming around.
Story so far...
After arriving on Earth Ares wastes no time getting acquainted with the local inhabitant of a nearby farm, engaging the being in combat only to discover the inadequate fighting potential of the man which ultimately led to the farmer's demise. Ready to travel after a brief night's rest the boy mounts a cow and goes forth into the wide rolling plains.
Traveling quickly became a bored but not quick enough as the next thing he knew he was in the middle of an old West town govern by a Mr. White. When two robbers hold up a store Ares had been browsing in the shopkeeper enlists him to catch up with the culprits and bring back his zeni. Finding this an easy task, the teenager tracks down the bandits but only a hair too late as another bounty hunter beat him to the punch having knocked out the two bandits. Accusing the boy of being one of the thieves the gunman draws on the youth only to be taken back by the ease at which Ares caught the bullets out of midair.
More interested in getting the cash back Ares quickly disposes of the mercenary and retrieves the sack of bills and the man's hat before returning to the store to present his spoils. Upon entry, the youth is confronted with a man dressed down in a white suit speaking with the store clerk who greets the boy, impressed by his accomplishments.
Introducing himself as Mr. White he convinces Ares to take up position as the town sheriff by which the teen passively accepts. Now wearing a complimentary leather coat, hat and his new badge the boy visits the local saloon for a drink. While there the two robbers from earlier are sulking from their loss till one notices the hat on Ares' head as being that of the desperado's from that morning.
Red, the shorter criminal, denounces that and claims it to be an accomplice or possibly the one that done the gunman in and made off with the loot. Now with a posse of men, Red rises and readies to jump the unaware Ares turned about at the bar.
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread.php?t=25278
Also wouldn't mind company if anyone's interested. Was going to try hopping in another after this for some relations gathering but suppose now is as good a time as any, not to mention it would make for a more involving story once the twists start coming around.
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