09-13-2009, 06:16 PM
Was it something I said?
Also, his bio in my profile would be useful for starters.
Don't have any other posts yet, still forming the basis of the character for another 5 or so posts, after which I'll start with character development.
I'm looking for some comments or criticism on the storyline and character themselves, not really on the grammar/expression side of it all. I know I've got tons of badly worded sentences, paragraphs and such, however a more pressing issue is if the image I'm trying to send out is as coherent as it looks in my head.
This is basically the first character that I have ever made that I can't identify with. In the sense that, he isn't my polar opposite, nor is he similar to me, or a self-insertion persona. He is different from me in both reactions, and way of thinking. I think I can understand what he would do in most situations, hence being able to write as him, however the way I put it in words might not come across as such.
I'm still molding him into who I think he should be.
Any comments and such are welcome. Please and thanks.
Also, his bio in my profile would be useful for starters.
Don't have any other posts yet, still forming the basis of the character for another 5 or so posts, after which I'll start with character development.
I'm looking for some comments or criticism on the storyline and character themselves, not really on the grammar/expression side of it all. I know I've got tons of badly worded sentences, paragraphs and such, however a more pressing issue is if the image I'm trying to send out is as coherent as it looks in my head.
This is basically the first character that I have ever made that I can't identify with. In the sense that, he isn't my polar opposite, nor is he similar to me, or a self-insertion persona. He is different from me in both reactions, and way of thinking. I think I can understand what he would do in most situations, hence being able to write as him, however the way I put it in words might not come across as such.
I'm still molding him into who I think he should be.
Any comments and such are welcome. Please and thanks.
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A decade ago, I never thought I would be, at twenty-three, on the verge of spontaneous combustion. Woe-is-me.